12 Days of Christmas: Writing Tips Day 9

Day 9

 

Take a look at a page of your WIP (work in progress) and count how many long versus short sentences you have. Read the page out loud. Where do you stumble, have to take a breath, or get irritated with choppiness?

Shorter sentences are great for building tension. Look for places to use them.

Example: “911. What’s your emergency?” An insanely calm woman came on the line, her voice echoing through a tunnel in my head.

“My sister—”

“Tell them where we are,” the stranger instructed.

I glanced around. Water. Trees. Dirt. The bridge. The name of the creek stuck somewhere underneath my tongue.

 

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12 Days of Christmas: Writing Tips Day 8

Day 8

Sometimes simple is better. Especially when it comes to everyday actions. When you write, “I sipped my Coke,” the reader understands it has to be opened and lifted to your lips.

Example: Les reached out and set his hand on Lucy’s face.

Versus

Les touched Lucy’s face.

Or

Les set his hand on Lucy’s face.

When your character touches someone, we assume the “reaching out” part. Look for actions you can simplify.

 

**bonus tip–everyday means commonplace, while every day means each day.

 

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When all twelve days have been posted, you can find them here–12 Days of Christmas: Writing Tips.

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12 Days of Christmas: Writing Tips Day 5

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12 Days of Christmas: Writing Tips Day 2

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